THE TOP LINE: The story is about police discrimination towards adolescents, who are placed into police custody. However one day the tables turn... The policeman hits a adolescent and he happens to be related to the two discriminated adolescents that are put in police custody. The next day the two adolescent people confront the policeman, they are now in control.
THE BIG QUESTION: What will happen to the policeman? Will justice prevail?
TREATMENT: The scene is set at a local bakery. Inside the bakery, a smiling assistant is serving cupcakes. Close up of cupcakes. The atmosphere is light-hearted and relaxed. In the shop, 3 teenagers are looking at the cakes. They leave and hang around the door of the shop. Meanwhile, a middle aged customer emerges fro the shop and bumps into one of the teenagers. A few minutes later, the shop owner behind the cashier tries to find her purse but realises she has lost her purse. The teenagers exchange glances and deny the theft but make a run for it. A middle-aged policeman, who has been staring into the shop window, turns, hails at them and goes after them.
Cut to interview at police station............
Cut to teenagers being released and greeted by friend who is waiting for them, wearing a distinctive hat.
Cut to scene in which the policeman receives a call from his superior................
Cut to scene in which the policeman is driving home from work and pulls out onto a path in front of a cyclist - the cyclist turns out to be the friend of the teenagers.
This sounds more like TV crime drama, in my opinion, than a feature film.
ReplyDeleteYour research into how treatments are developed is good.
After a lot of further development, the treatment is much more confident now. You have situated the events firmly in more easily visualized and precise locations; the events now are linked and therefore the narrative flows. Once you have settled some crucial casting questions, you can develop the next (final?) scene. Currently, you are working on character interviews.
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